Your appeal is already powerful and heartfelt. Here's a refined version with better flow and clarity while keeping the urgency intact:
Help Save My Son's Life: Urgent Medical Treatment Needed
Dear Friends, Brethren, and Well-Wishers,
My name is Bishop Tshili from Zimbabwe, and I am reaching out with a heavy heart and an urgent plea. My 25-year-old son, Wenkosi, has battled chronic kidney disease for nine years. On October 21, 2024, his condition worsened when he suffered a devastating stroke and severe brain bleeding. Since then, he has been fighting for his life, and we are doing everything possible to save him.
Wenkosi is now in a hospital in India, where doctors have discovered serious heart complications. Before his kidney transplant can proceed, they must first stabilize his heart, making his treatment even more critical and expensive.
How You Can Help
The total cost of Wenkosi’s life-saving treatment is $31,000 USD, which covers:
✅ Kidney Transplant Surgery
✅ Heart Treatment & Neurological Evaluation
✅ Post-Operative Care & Medications
✅ Hospitalization & Three-Month Stay in India
This financial burden is overwhelming for my family, but I believe in the power of community, kindness, and faith. I am humbly appealing for your support to help us raise the necessary funds.
💙 Every donation—no matter how small—brings us closer to saving Wenkosi’s life.
If you are unable to donate, please share this appeal with your friends, family, and networks. Your prayers, encouragement, and generosity mean the world to us.
With your kindness and God's grace, my son can get the chance to heal and live again.
Donation Information
For direct donations to the hospital, please find the official bank details here: [Artemis Hospital Bank Details]
🙏 Thank you from the depths of my heart. May God bless you abundantly.
With gratitude,
Bishop F. Tshili
Zimbabwe